Quadrille Night at the dVerse

Hey the challenge on the bar at last night’s poets pub was to write a quadrille. (The Quadrille combines two essential elements – a single word that has to be included in the body of your text. The second is to limit  the poem to 44 words exactly including the given word.) Last night’s word was “spoil” – not a word I enjoy…

It took me a couple of tries to get to what I needed to say:

Plays Well With Others

A sport is a good guy

He’ll take one for the team

give it his all, sweat blood

We like this guy.  He never

messes with the chi, cries over

spilt milk, throws his helmet.

Not a spoilsport, spreading

misery every place he goes.

 

Blind-sided

No one likes the shock of sour milk

glugged straight from the carton

in a dark, late-night kitchen,

but it ain’t spoilt, Batman.  Clean up

that floor and pray you left enough

for Mom’s Sunday morning

melt-in-your-mouth pancakes!

Or we might spoil you.

But I finally did. discovering along the way I have enough ideas constellated around this word to write an entire book about child-rearing.  Happily, I’m a poet and don’t have to. This will do!

     Fatal Flaw

Don’t like that word!

Not meant to.

Stands for  – rotten, ruined

shamed, blamed,

humiliated, judged.

It’s a warning. Meant to help

and heed.  You were always

too sensitive.

Too much, too little,

 never enough. For what?

Life!  Success! Achievement!  WINNING!

I choose happiness.

See?  Spoiled!

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8 Responses to Quadrille Night at the dVerse

  1. Lona Gynt says:

    I like all three offerings! You spoiled us! 😉

  2. Frank Hubeny says:

    Nice descriptive phrase: “He never
    messes with the chi”

  3. Gina says:

    amazing! such a wonderful collection of spoils

  4. Oh.. I had a hard time with the word first too… love that dialogue with yourself…

  5. jillys2016 says:

    Love seeing the process you went through to meet the challenge. ( I wrote a second one but opted not to post it…yet) The limitation of the word count makes us work for it and you worked it so well!

  6. Janice says:

    What an absorbing collection of quadrilles. You do reach a pinnacle with the third one using a clever dialogue format that gets inside my own uneasiness with the way we talk negatively about a person being spoiled.

    • Thanks Janice- the 44 word restriction is really challenging – and humbling. With this word I feel like a hunter sneaking up on her quarry, I’ve got it in my sights, but have yet to nail it.

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